Author Commentary

Carlos Olson.

This story was written to notify the greed and power hunger of the American president George W Bush Jr and his unfair driving of the American people to get more oil, which would turn into more money and power for him self.

The names in the story make it pretty obvious who I am attacking but I think they are all good play on words and motifs. Like Sodom Husain being changed to So-dam insane, Lio sounding like an exotic substance but originally being oil, George Bush being changed to William (his middle name) Bushly and Q8 which was a simple abbreviated version of the actual Iraq city Kuwait.

There was not too many images in the story but the only obvious ones were So-dam insane being a cockroach and Mr Bushly being a little fat ant.
So-dam insane was a cockroach to show that he was a dirty low level being often as the cockroach is seen as and Mr Bushly was depicted as being a little fat ant to show his greed and immaturity to get what ever he wants to make him more powerful.

Lio is a huge symbol in this story by being the one substance that everybody wants to improve their society and position of power in the world. If you have it in the story you are able to make working hours longer and therefore gain more time to collect crops and do other industrial activities which will eventually end up as money for the population’s leader, while in real life lio, as oil, will make electricity which will make cars and machines run and generate money faster than humans could by them selves.

My sentence lengths were deliberately put in to end when either the day or plans were finished.
The pace was quite the same through the whole story but the creative tension was done by leaving “…” to make the reader guess what would happen next. Like when it says “In and out and back home with plenty of lio was the plan, but oh how wrong Mr Bushly was…” leaving a big hole of what might happen and the reader guessing what it might be, making them want to read on.

Alagory story.

The search for eternal power.
By Carlos Olson 10E

The tiny dirt city of Antlanta lay silent at night while all the small bugs slept. The only ones awake were those tiresome soldiers watching guard out front of the president’s room, who goes by the name of William Bushly. William or Mr President was one of those fat little, chauvinistic, patriotically cocky men who believed that Antlanta was the only way.

It was a darker than usual night as Mr Bushly paced up and down his room, pondering about the perpetual blackness, often tripping over things he couldn’t see which intensified his rage. “What are we going to do about the night? I don’t like it one bit!” the president yelled with his triumphant voice. “It doesn’t matter dear, come back to bed” moaned first lady Barbara, the presidents wife, as she lay in bed. “It does matter; you see when its dark people get tired and stop working!” Mr Bushly said emphasising on the word working. “if I can find some way of making it light all the time, my people would never stop working and I would become the leader of the richest most powerful colony in all the land”……

The very next day Mr Bushly set up a team of the smartest ants in the colony to work on this very scheme. It took months off intense work to find out a way to make it bright but they eventually did. It consisted of a tall stick with a bowl on the top, and in that bowl would be water, grounded up dirt and a rare substance called lio. These ingredients mixed together probably made an enormous field of light. Many of these sticks would then be placed around the work areas so the workers would keep working through the night. The only problem was, lio was a rare substance around Antlanta and there was not nearly enough to make all these light sticks. Mr Bushly was stumped, he didn’t know what to do, so he resorted to the only thing he knew well and that was force.

All work was cancelled and trials were held for the next five days, to see the fittest, strongest and most deadly ants, to make an army which would go out and get the ever important (to the president) lio. And before you knew it the top three hundred thousand ants or now soldiers were ready to go out and explore the world.
The rumours were, from the wise Grass hoppers, that there was a huge river of lio was to the west in a land called Q 8. Q 8 was a mysterious desert land which was ruled by the evil dictator, So-dam insane. So-dam insane was a greedy little cockroach whose only ambition was to make money for him self no matter what his people had to go through (a bit like Mr Bushly). So the following Friday at 0 600 the troops began their long march.

It took many gruelling months of walking to reach the destination, even though Mr Bushly road there on tamed bitchy boys. The soldiers then found a camping sight just a hundred of meters out side of Q 8. Mr Bushly’s plan was to go in the following night with the remaining lio, water and dirt in a mini hand held stick, which the leader of each group would carry and attack the sleeping enemy. In and out and back home with plenty of lio was the plan, but oh how wrong Mr Bushly was…

The groups went in at night as planed and got to their positions ready to attack. But to their surprise the city was as bright as day, lined with like sticks down every street. This made the fight very even and over a longer period than predicted. The war actually seemed to take forever. Day after day, week after week, month after month and even year after year passed as the battle ragged on. With Mr Bushly having to call reinforcements as the Antlantians invaded almost half of the city.

Eventually after nearly a life time of fighting So-dam insane was captured and so was the lio. But with a heavy price on Mr Bushly’s life. Not only did his people back home dislike him for going to war but also for increasing work hours from six to sixteen hours with the new light sticks in place. So he was later voted out of office and a new female president was put in soon after Mr Bushly returned home. So the main lesson for Mr Bushly was that greed and power are not always the answer when you have to sacrifice your own to get it.

The end.

CARLOS WROTE THIS

MACEDONIA IS GREECE

LOVWE FROM CARLOS

Chapter 5 questions

1) See Below.

2) My questions:

1. Now with Snowball gone, do you think that napoleon will bring the farm down or advance it in technology and how it runs? Explain.
2. In real life do you think Leon Trotsky; the person Snowball represents will come back to the farm? If so how will he do this? Look up the Russian revolution to do this.
3. Do you think the windmill will actually be built? If so look up the Russian revolution and see what the windmill represents.

3) Kathleens Questions:

1.Do you think that the pigs should have gone with the windmill plan or the plan to increase food production?

I think they should have gone with the food production idea, because the windmill creates electicity which is a thing of man, so they are turning themselves into humans.

2.Do you believe that Napolean Is always right?

NO i dont think he is right, but at the start when him and snowball sort of getting along with thier ideas and the farm was working great.

3.What is the colour ribbon Mollie likes to wear?

mollie likes all differnet colours of ribbions as long as there ribbions.

Chapter 1:
Old major the Prophet
Main Events:

• The animals gathered together for an important meeting after the humans went to bed.
  
• Old Major gave an inspirational speech about how the animals should take over the humans and their land.
  
• The outline of the seven commandments was said by old major.
  
• The Animals agreed on rallying together to bring down their human overlords.

Qoutes :
“What is the nature of this life of ours? Let us face it, our lives are miserable, laborious and short. We are born, we are given just just so much food as will keep the breath in our bodies, and those of us who are capable of it are forced to work to the last atom of our stregth” Old major page 3.

“Man is the olny real enemy we have. Remove man from the scene, and the root cause of hunger and over work is abolished for ever.” Old major page 4.

“That is my message to you, comrades: Rebellion! I do not know when that rebellion will come, it might be in a week or in a hundred years, but it know, as surely as I see this straw beneath my feet, that sooner or later justice will be done.” Old major page 5.

“What ever goes on two legs is an enemy. Whatever goes upon four legs, or has wings is a friend. And remember also that in fighting man, we must not come to resembler him.” Old Major page 6.

Chapter 2:
The beginning of an empire.
Main events:

• Old major dies.
  
• Napoleon, Squealer and Snow ball took countroll of the animals and lead them to defeat the humans and took over the farm.
  
• The Seven commandments were written.
  
• The pigs steal the milk……

Qoutes
“Comrades those ribbons that you are so devoted to are a badge of slavery.” Snow ball page 10.

“Ribbons are considered as clothes, which are the mark of a human being. All animals should go naked.” Snow ball page 13.

"Now comrades, to the hay field! Let us make it in a point of honour to get in the harvest more quickly than Jones and his men could do" Snowball page 16.

Chapter 3
Everything is at peace…
Main events:

• The animal’s conduct a great harvest were every one is given the same amount of food.
  
• The pigs teach the animal’s basic reading and writing skills but some animals are better than others.
  
• Most animals cant remember or write the whole seven commandments so it is shortened to “Four legs good two legs bad”
  
• The milk problem is solved with a vivid explanation of the pigs needed it because it helps them make decisions and makes their brains work better.

Quotes:
“Comrades you do not imagine, I hope, that we pigs are doing this in a spirit of selfishness and privilege? I dislike them myself. Milk and apples (this has been proved by science comrades) to contain substances absolutely necessary to the well being of a pig. We pigs are brainworkers.” Page 23 Squealer.

“I will work harder!” which boxer adopted as his personal motto.” Page 18 Boxer.

“Donkeys live a long time. None of you has ever seen a dead donkey.” Page 19 old Benjamin.

Chapter 4
The Battle of cowshed.
Main events:

• The idea of the rebellion is spread across to the other farms by pigeons and is carried out on the farms.
  
• The battle of cowshed is fought, and very strategically won by Snowball. Boxer also nearly kills a young man by kicking him in the face.

Quotes:
“War is war. The only good human is a dead one.” Snowball page 28

“He is dead; I had no intension of doing that. I forgot that I was wearing iron shoes. Who will believe that I did not do this on purpose?” Boxer page 28.

“There was much discussion at to what the battle should be called. In the end it was named the Battle of cowshed, since that was where the ambush had been sprung.”
Narrator page 29.

Chapter 5

All Hail Napoleon.
Main events:

• Mollie runs away for good, to another human for sugar and ribbions.
• Snowball and Napoleon have a huge debate about a windmill that will power the whole farm and Napoleon wins by saying not to build it.
  
• Snow ball gets driven out by the dogs and napoleon
  
• Napoleon takes rule and cancels Sunday meetings and forms a committee of pigs that take care of all the issues in the farm.

Qoutes:

""Do you give me your honour that that man was not stroking your nose?" Said clover. "It isn't true!" repeated mollie. Without saying anything to the others clover went to mollie's stall and turned over the strw with her hoof. HIdden under the strw was a little pile of sugar and several bunches of ribbion of different colours."Clover to mollie and the narrator page 30 -31.

"Commrades, i trust that every animal here appreciates the sacrifice that Comrade Napoleon has made in taking this extra labour upon himself. Do not imagine, Comrades, that leadership is pleasure! On the contray, it is a deep and heavy responsibility. No one believes more firmly than comrade Napoleon that all animals are equal..." Squearler page 37.

"That evening squearler explained to the animals that Napoleon had never in reality been opposed to the windmill... Snowball actually stole the drawing from Napoleon's papers..."Why whould he had spoken so strongly against it then?" That was Napoleon's cunning. He semmed to oppose it just to get rid of Snowball" Squearler page 38 - 39.

Book Report Carlos Olson

The book I chose for my book report was Deadly! No. 1 Nude, by Morris Gleitzman and Paul Jennings. It is number one in a range of five of the Deadly! series first published in 2000 by Penguin books Australia.

I chose this book because it was an easy read (thanks ms Wilson), and when I was younger I used to really like Paul Jennings so I thought it would be all right.

The series is about the adventures of two people, Amy and Sprocket.
Amy is the birthday girl but none of her birthday surprises are what she expected. First her mother has a nerves breakdown and her father is gravely suspected of having a different family with another woman, all on her special day. So what Amy decides to do is to investigate and hopefully find the truth of her deceptive father, but on this investigation she finds nothing but a baby and more theories about her father. Before she knows it a little blond six year old is shoving her and the baby into a military vehicle and speeding away out of town…
Meanwhile Sprocket has no idea how or why he is naked, in the middle of the jungle and has no memory of anything. But the only thing he knows is that some little six year olds want to capture him and take something away from him, even though he is naked and has nothing.

What I enjoyed about this book is the way they interchanged between stories which I think will eventually meet up together and become a good tale. But at the moment it isn’t a good tale.

What I didn’t like about this story was that how things happened so quickly and kept changing and how the maturity of the book kept changing. I didn’t like the pace of the story because it was too this happened then that happened with little explanation.
It was also very frustrating how the maturity level changes in the novel. At one moment it was talking about affairs, deception and biology, “All those nights you came in late and thought I was asleep and crept into my room to give me a kiss, when you ponged of someone’s perfume”, and then it is talking about little children searching through poo for something that Sprocket swallowed, “He looked at the big brown piece of poo as if it was made of gold.”

I actually wouldn’t recommend this book to anyone. It would be to mature for young people and to immature for older people and you also need to read all five novels to get anything out of the books because the first one leaves way too much open for you to put the others away.

By Carlos Olson 10 E.