Author Commentary

Carlos Olson.

This story was written to notify the greed and power hunger of the American president George W Bush Jr and his unfair driving of the American people to get more oil, which would turn into more money and power for him self.

The names in the story make it pretty obvious who I am attacking but I think they are all good play on words and motifs. Like Sodom Husain being changed to So-dam insane, Lio sounding like an exotic substance but originally being oil, George Bush being changed to William (his middle name) Bushly and Q8 which was a simple abbreviated version of the actual Iraq city Kuwait.

There was not too many images in the story but the only obvious ones were So-dam insane being a cockroach and Mr Bushly being a little fat ant.
So-dam insane was a cockroach to show that he was a dirty low level being often as the cockroach is seen as and Mr Bushly was depicted as being a little fat ant to show his greed and immaturity to get what ever he wants to make him more powerful.

Lio is a huge symbol in this story by being the one substance that everybody wants to improve their society and position of power in the world. If you have it in the story you are able to make working hours longer and therefore gain more time to collect crops and do other industrial activities which will eventually end up as money for the population’s leader, while in real life lio, as oil, will make electricity which will make cars and machines run and generate money faster than humans could by them selves.

My sentence lengths were deliberately put in to end when either the day or plans were finished.
The pace was quite the same through the whole story but the creative tension was done by leaving “…” to make the reader guess what would happen next. Like when it says “In and out and back home with plenty of lio was the plan, but oh how wrong Mr Bushly was…” leaving a big hole of what might happen and the reader guessing what it might be, making them want to read on.